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The Morning After…

2008 November 14
by Kim Nunley

There’s a screenwriting blog that I read on a daily basis, and every few months the woman who runs it has a Short Scene Competition.

The challenge is to write a SINGLE-PAGE scene and include three words that she chooses. This latest one had to include Thanksgiving, election, and chihuahua. It can be any genre. The only real rules are that it has to fit on a single page and the three words need to be utilized in a creative manner.

I submitted my entry last night. Here it is (please excuse the incorrect formatting), entitled The Morning After.

INT. HOUSE – VARIOUS ROOMS – MORNING

The light of dawn infiltrates through window blinds and into a bare, simple bedroom. The only conspicuous feature is a candle holder; it intertwines two candles into one design.

In bed, KIA and RACHEL lie with their eyes shut, but the tangled sheets and the pillow on the floor suggest it wasn’t a peaceful night of sleep. A phone RINGS.

Kia’s eyes open; they’re bloodshot, puffy. She remains still. It rings twice, a third time. A moment, then a woman’s sophisticated, and yet delicate voice from the other room.

MOM (O.S.)
(on recording)
Sweetie, it’s Mom. Just wanted to
see…I know you must be disappointed.
Anyway, I need to figure out Thanksgiving.
You know you’re both welcome. Grandpa
will be there, so I understand if you’re not
comfortable again. Love you.

Kia softly kisses Rachel still lying asleep next to her, then slips out of the room.She shuffles sleepily through the living room, passing by an empty pizza box and depleted beer bottles. Without breaking stride, she flips on the NEWS and moves to the front door.

NEWS ANCHOR (O.S.)
An undeniably historic election as a
Black American was chosen
as the President of the United States.

Kia opens the door and picks up the newspaper on her doorstep. Halfway amidst shutting the door, something outside catches her eye and she stops.

A WOMAN on her cell phone is too enamored with her conversation to notice her chihuahua lifting its leg on a MARRIAGE FOR ALL, NO ON PROP 8 campaign sign in Kia’s yard.

WOMAN
Crazy, right? A Black man elected.
Change has really come to America.

Kia watches the dog finish, then shuts the door with conviction. She pulls a cell phone from her pocket and dials.

KIA
Hey Mom. Listen, I think
we will come to Thanksgiving
this year.
2 Responses Post a comment
  1. Désirée permalink
    November 19, 2008

    Thank you for showing me to your blog and for your comments on my script.

    I could not quite figure out what you wanted to say. A lesbian woman that has not a good relationship with her mum, Obama has become President and a dog is peeing on a sign. I feel that the heart of this story is not brought out. Why would she suddenly come to Thanksgiving?

  2. Désirée permalink
    November 20, 2008

    I read your comments on my blog. Maybe you should have had the mother asking if she couldn’t bring her boyfriend? Now we don’t know if the girlfriend is known to the family.

    I would love to swap scripts for reading and comments for the next contest. What a great idea.

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